GoatLord
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Creaphis said:
But, this song has no large-scale structure at all, which makes it sound incoherent. Without a structure, it starts to sound just like a bunch of notes.
I'm not sure where you got that idea; the majority of the song is in a Hungarian Minor key (I forget which one), while the E1M1 part is in a less eccentric minor key. The original song was too consonant for my taste; so what appears random are actually carefully reworked melodies and harmonies designed to be ingested after several listens.
1. Divide the song into clear phrase and theme sections with lengths of 8 bars, or 16, 32, etc. Right now, you have one theme phasing into another at senseless unpredictable moments, and your thematic areas are all randomly different lengths.
My metal influences are a bit atypical; bands like Portal, Autopsy, Cannibal Corpse, Death Breath, Human Remains, Gorguts, etc. These groups often have a progressive nature, where there may be a number of passages in a single song, with numerous changes in tempo, key and rhythmic pacing. The loose structure of extreme and avant garde metal is the basis for a lot of my metal-based music, so the lack of cohesion is intentional.
2. This song has no thematic unity. You use a handful of different themes, but then you throw each of them away and never revisit them. Take this attitude for your composition: if a theme is worth using, it's worth reusing (with development, of course).
Again, this relates to my influences. The song is intended to be progressive in nature, so themes are intentionally left behind. I wanted to establish different moods using different compositional methods and tempos. There was no need to revisit themes because the structure is more about changes in mood than cohesion. I appreciate the criticism though; I only have marginal music theory knowledge, so there's always room to improve.
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04-22-08 03:33 
