t.v.
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nice, it looks like you had fun making this.
but...
it sounds more like a summary of 'charged' words. Certain words are often used in poems to add a specific charge/ power to the text, but mostly they just make texts sound cliche.
Think of pop/ metal song lyrics. They are often full of these words. Which is fine because in this type of music it is not really about the words, but with poems it is.
I understand you wanted to incorporate Doom-like words to make it a Doom poem, but it would be better (more poetic) to try and capture the feeling of Doom in words without using obvious words (like: Doom, Hell, demon, death etc).
But if you just want to have fun, pay no attention to my ranting :-)
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04-08-09 04:23 
