pritch Posted May 16, 2002 Wow I just looked in here for the first time in ages. DSM really has done miracles for this forum, nice work my friend. Heh, my exams are nearly over, 29th May. Then I can write more. I'll finish Service 18 then. Here's a quick poem for now. The Love song of the Marine's wife. Cold is the barrel that rests on you Screams are the passion that pull you through Night is the fire that lights your eyes I am the hope that keeps you alive. Mucking and digging is all that's there Hell's work is done and Heaven despairs Yours is a fight that is truly eternal Always ominously nocturnal. Cold is the barrel that lays rest to you Screams are the passion and now you scream too Night is the fire that dies with your eyes Ours is the love destroyed and denied. Copyright Faber & Faber, 2002 0 Share this post Link to post
dsm Posted May 16, 2002 Glad to hear that your exams will be over soon - mine have barely started and they wont be over until end of June :-( I'm afraid I don't have any constructive criticism to give you in regards to your poem as I'm not particularly interested in poems in general, but it looks ok to me. 0 Share this post Link to post
pritch Posted May 19, 2002 hey it was only a quickie! You do one then. 0 Share this post Link to post