Wildman Posted March 11, 2002 If you care, Part 7 of TY is up at Doomcenter. 0 Share this post Link to post
dsm Posted March 11, 2002 /drools - me makes a mental note to get my arse over to doomcenter once I've checked the other fanfic threads 0 Share this post Link to post
dsm Posted March 11, 2002 Having read the chapter I have to say that personally, I think you shift the point of view a little too often in this chapter. It's nothing big really (I did something similar in my Doom story, but mine wasn't as well-structured and was generally a bad thing which I plan to edit when I release my "improved" version) but I do think it adds difficulty to the full comprehension of the story. Other than that I find your story as well-written as it could be, great work :-) 0 Share this post Link to post
Wildman Posted March 12, 2002 Having read the chapter I have to say that personally, I think you shift the point of view a little too often in this chapter. Yes, you are right, but there was really no way to get around it. I needed to bring all the characters together for the final stretch, and each sub-section was too small to put in seperate sections. As always, I appreciate your comments. 0 Share this post Link to post
