Cobra Posted August 18, 2002 Once there was agent assigned to destroy Hell and it's monsters. This agent was named "Cobra". She was the top agent. Cobra had got them all except one: SubbZerrio. (It's just Sub Zero spelled funny. I don't want the Mortal Combat guy kicking my ass for naming my villian Sub Zero.) SubbZerrio was the "King of Creul". Now let the mission begin! To be continiued... 0 Share this post Link to post
dsm Posted August 18, 2002 I dunno, what your goals with this story are, but to my eye it looks like a bad excuse to spam. This story is: Poorly written Completely uninteresting Downright meaningless Totally un-serious (it doesn't even try to be funny) Too short to catch the reader's interest. Anyway, there's a chance that your story might get interesting yet, so you may continue - but for the Pete's sake, write longer! *Initiate thread lockdown* *Thread lockdown successful* *End of Transmission* 0 Share this post Link to post
