SyntherAugustus

I made a revison of that sonnet I did earlier. Need some comments.

When I first saw you with your lustrous eyes
The world had seemed to collapse before me
I almost felt like I might just die
Before my soul can tell you to believe

That you transcend the beauty of all angels
The eyes of mine do not hallucinate
I feel as if I were in a tangle
My heart, it beats, awaiting for a fate

For my emotions sink in deepest love
To your visage, and you astral figure
None other, that I will ever dream of
That I will remember forever more

I wish you can live for eternity
Cause my love for you is infinity