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  1. I'm working on a story that would likely be used as my Make Something Unreal ut2007 project (matinee movie). I'm not planning on making the full film with ut2007 (maybe a scene). This is from the main document.

    (ignore anything about the series for now, as it doesnt have to do with the MSUC project).

    “Aknai: For Love” is going to be a science fiction love epic that will follow with a series (with indirect plot. The main plot of the movie will not relate to the series (known currently as “The Cry”.
    The Film takes place in 2010, not far from now. In Turkey (subject to change), a corporation led by Jakob Cuthboth (known as just “Noz”) takes over Turkey via a coup, paying off various military leasers to do so. He makes various false accusations that eventually convince the public. For a half year, Noz pretends to be the new leader. After the world has recognized him, he begins the plans for his war machine. Civilians randomly become slaves, and word eventually comes out. A neighboring country falls victim (unknown at the moment) to the war machine as Noz's empire begins to grow.
    The world doesn't know about this until a prominent rebel, Atiyha (at-tee-uh), spreads messages quietly as a form of public. Noz figures it out and forces her into his grasp.
    It doesn't take long for the world to know of the problem, and the U.N. scramble for forces, with many European countries and eventually the United States participating. What they begin to learn is that Noz plans on creating weapon technology far beyond the human imagination, and he must be stopped before he tries to take over the world.
    The Tennan Squad, formed of a diverse countries of soldiers, will be the main focus of the story. The main character is Lenna Lorthwick, a Corporal in which the audience will eventually find out her lesbian love for Atiyha. The secondary character is Augustus Valek (or Augi), a Sergeant who is trying to couple with Lenna. The third character is John Almeda, also Corporal, who serves as a friend of Augi. The three, as well as various minor characters, will be the main people of the plot (with Lenna being the main focus).
    The main focus of the film will be the forbidden love of Lenna and Atiyha, which ends in the tragic death of Atiyha (being the climax, not the ending). The first humanoid mech (later known as the first HumaMech), the “Generation” , will also be focused. Lenna's main ship that she'll pilot, Athena , will be a focus in two scenes. A subplot of course will be Augi, as the audience will be familiar with the character as he'll be the main character of the series (if that happens).

    Need input!

    1. Foofoo


      hows aboot make it more brief so people can be bothered to read all that ;')

    2. zark


      Your English is pretty dire. And to be honest, the whole war idea sounds so much more appealing than the love story part - I don't really see why you've felt the need to make it a romantic tale, to me it seems horribly cliched.

    3. SyntherAugustus


      Aww but the lesbian loving is needed. :(

      I need a find a way to make it less cliche then. And yes I'll try to town down the details.

      edit: hopefull her death wont be too cliche

      [Atiyha is captured at the moment and Lenna attempts a rescue mission, but is captured as well. Noz is aware of the 'affair', and plans on tormenting Lenna]

      As Lenna wakes up [in the barren room], she sees Noz holding Atiyha with a pistol on her back, and various guards guarding him. She looks at Atiyha with the hopeless look. Noz tells her to walk out of the room if she wanted to see Atyiha alive, but to never see her again. Lenna begins to walk in a straight line to the door, but her love for Atyiha causes sudden flashbacks, making Lenna stop. She then turns around and grabs a guard's gun, breaking his hand and shoots the others. However, as she gets up to Noz, Noz shoots Atiyha through the back of her chest and exits the room via a back door, guarded. The room shuts and the room is just her and the dying Atiyha. She picks her up, regretting her decision, knowing that if she didn't do what she did Atiyha would have been alive.

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