Alex Dark

Cool thanks. In the part where you are on the maintance lift and you control it step by step down the tracks, where do you go? There is a door at the last station, but when I try to open it it says "runs through security 01. I flipped the switch in a security room located by the door, but it still doesn't open.

Did I pass it? I got the memo from Abrams at the Alpha Lab 5 or whatever but then I moved on to the next area (after I killed that mini-boss).

Ahh but when calling other people stupid, I spare no expense.

Basically dude, show us, don't tell us. Be more descriptive... really try to draw the reader into your story. Read this to yourself and think 'What would I think about this paragraph if I was the reader? Does this make sense to me? Does this explain the situation well enough, but still keeps the reader drawn into the story?'. Don't use as many 'I + verb' statements. :) Also, some of the story elements don't make sense. He found a radio in the wall? Ohhh okay! D: He couldn't get a way out of his cell, so the door just slammed open by itself? Ohhh okay! D: He was sent to Silent Hill to figure out why Hellspawn wasn't invading it? Ohhh okay! D: OH WAIT NO. Try and think things through so your character can come to logical solutions in the story. If your plot devices don't make sense, then don't use them. This story is just basically weakly written. Try reading other fictional works (read: horror novels) for reference and try to make your writing better. "My name is Teiganus Dos, Teigan for short. I was sent to this town, Silent Hill, to figure out why the hellspawn weren’t invading it." That's the big boy way of explaining the situation!

Very nice. :)

The zombie head on the lower-right probably doesn't need to be blurred as much... also, I like the idea of having bloody writing, but I think it'd be a lot better if different words besides KILL, DEATH, DIE, HELL, RAWR, and SLAM! were used. ;) I really like the way you faded the pentagrams and the rusty metal together to make the background, but I think it'd be hella cool if a few more enemies were blended into the foreground to add a more epic collage-esque feel to it. Nice work man. :)

Yes, it really was.

Wow lol that was really bad.